Just finished the demo, and it was a delight! Things flowed well, and though sentences did run on a bit at times, I was enjoying myself too much to notice more often than not XD
I'm including a list of minor typos I noticed as I went through, just to hopefully help out!
It’s hard to believe you’re doing this. You’re going to be working for yourself. Picking your clients, culminating your image.
The phrase is 'cultivating your image', so I'm assuming this is a typo that got autocorrected or something similar.
Before he can answer, someone pushes past you roughly, causing you to hit your side against a nearby seat. Markus quickly steps in front of you protectively. You’re unsure of the look that Markus gives the person but it was enough to stop them in their tracks. Maybe they thought Markus looked far to nice to be rude to.
This whole paragraph takes place before M tells you their name, so it was a bit early for that.
I nod softly, not really wanting the book or to be here any longer. I take it without saying another word."
This is the first option when parting ways with M and they give you their book; there's a " when no dialogue has occurred.
Cam nods, the bus hissing at its stop allowing you two to clamor on.
I'm assuming this is meant to be 'climb' or 'clamber', and not 'a group of noisy people shouting'.
congratulations on the release!!! i've been waiting for this since i saw some random ask of yours in august last year! thank you so much and i can't wait to play! <3
just finished chapter 1! i'm absolutely in love with your writing, the characters (minus a few select people), and the entire premise of the story. everything flowed so well, and it's obvious how much love and time was put into this! it's everything i've been looking forward to and i can't wait for more!
I'm glad you enjoyed it! Part of me was worried it was too long at one point. Yeah I had to have some bad apples in the story, I feel like it's essential to the type of story I want to tell. I look forward to how you feel about chapter 2!
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Just finished the demo, and it was a delight! Things flowed well, and though sentences did run on a bit at times, I was enjoying myself too much to notice more often than not XD
I'm including a list of minor typos I noticed as I went through, just to hopefully help out!
The phrase is 'cultivating your image', so I'm assuming this is a typo that got autocorrected or something similar.
This whole paragraph takes place before M tells you their name, so it was a bit early for that.
This is the first option when parting ways with M and they give you their book; there's a " when no dialogue has occurred.
I'm assuming this is meant to be 'climb' or 'clamber', and not 'a group of noisy people shouting'.
Much appreciated! I'll go through and fix, I may end up switching to twee just for imports so that things don't get autocorrected etc.
YAY!!
Congratulations on the release!!
I admit, it's one of the if's I was most excited to play. I can't wait to play! Kisses from Brazil.🇧🇷❤️
I hope it lives up to your expectation then! All the love!
congratulations on the release!!! i've been waiting for this since i saw some random ask of yours in august last year! thank you so much and i can't wait to play! <3
Thank you so much. I know I made everyone wait, which I feel bad for. But I hope it's worth it!
Don't feel bad for taking the time! I think everyone prefers the quality of time than something rushed
Ah thanks for saying that. I didn't want it to feel rushed, which is making me actually need to add extra chapters in the long haul!
just finished chapter 1! i'm absolutely in love with your writing, the characters (minus a few select people), and the entire premise of the story. everything flowed so well, and it's obvious how much love and time was put into this! it's everything i've been looking forward to and i can't wait for more!
I'm glad you enjoyed it! Part of me was worried it was too long at one point. Yeah I had to have some bad apples in the story, I feel like it's essential to the type of story I want to tell. I look forward to how you feel about chapter 2!