Finished the demo last night and I am coming out of this as a Cammie lover. I am also a Jade and Chris hater and I have a theory about Kara and I think my MC will N O T like it🧍🏾♀️
I like this alot, the demo is great. The ros are writen quite well seeing how im stuck between the follower, rival and the writer. Not exactly sure who I will go with for the first play through. Also really wanting to throw hands with jade and the family. Not sure if you plan on adding something like that but definitely would fight jade given the choice.
So the MC will be able to break their relationships with certain characters for good or mend them, and also effect relationships of some of the other characters. If you want to throw down with Jade it's not off the table!
ok but the MC is soooo oblivious are u not seeing how awkward Cam is? he obviously likes u cause no if that was me i would overthink every single thing he did. and the side story? MC rly is blind maybe i should've given them some glasses...
oih my gosh, that was so so amazingly good, so well-written, fun and bittersweet. I hope we can have a chance to get revenge on our sister and ex-fiance. I wish you the best for writing and have a great time with it <3 I'm looking forward to more <3
Thank you! There will be ways to mess with Jade/Chris/ even MC's parents. It's possible to repair relationships of MC's and other characters or just completely wreck them. :D I'll take the wishes!
Loving this, for some reason I like playing on difficult mode so going for Mr. Grumpy for my first main play, but Cam is so adorable, I already playing the alt version 1 and 2, because my shy and need to tease will battle each other, so need they their own saves. Favorite character is Aunt Emma all the way. I'm super excited to see where this goes and getting MC the best life and getting her dog back .
Well just played the Demo and enjoyed. I am also interested in how the story would develop. Currently Kim and Wilkens have my interest as ROs but that may change. Kim because of their past history with the MC and Wiklens because they are cute and I want to see where a relationship with them would end up.
I'm glad you enjoyed it! Yeah I know it's hard to decide currently because you're still getting to know the RO's. It's going to be a journey thats for sure.
Yeah, I have that, too with the switch of pronouns. If you choose a female dog it was one time referred as a "he". Chris is referred to as "they" several times.
I really love Cam and everything feels really fluid and over all satisfyingly balanced!
I have an issue though with the ex. I decided to make them an ex-friend and I don't get their reasoning. How can a simple friend feel such deep betrayal for the MC getting together with Chris? I get why we got no direct reasoning in the demo for the suspense alone but sadly with the choice for them to be no ex whom MC had a relationship with it kinda....irks. After the confrontation I was seriously thinking "wtf is their problem with MC and why ist it automatically narrated through MCs thought process that we feel guilt??" The last bit regarding the guilt felt forced upon the reader... No friend would turn to such extremes on a friendship simply cause they hate the partner? I believe there is a good explanation for it. Still. With what limited information WE currently got with the demo that whole affair feels...i dunno how to describe it. Before I was so throughouly invested in the story and then I was kinda kicked Out of this trance, If you get what I mean. It was a tad bit confusing.
Sorry that I needed so much words to deliver what I meant, hope it conveys what I meant to say.
And don't get me wrong, I was one of the first lurkers to your Tumblr account, I anticipated this demo for a long time and I truly love everything about it to pieces. The described situation above irritated me cause Im autistic af and have a hard time not knowing why someone hates me/ has a problem with sth I did - it deeply concerns me and that results to overthinking -and it kinda always bleeds through my reading experience in interactive fictions 😅 As one can guess I tried several times to reach a sliver of understanding...to no avail.
I love how strong Cams character was portrayed, If I had to choose what I enjoyed the most in your story it would be that. He just feels so complex and...well, real. Simply amazing work!
I loved the route of Cam even before the demo, you delivered this expectation and more. Repect. Not many interactive fictions can do that and captivate their readers like that.
To add to this if you select the flirt options with the "ex friend" choice prior it is worded as though you were in a relationship previously and I think that is how the ex friend without the flirting comes off as well, it reads like there was an invested romantic relationship that the MC potentially cheated on as opposed to friends. That being said I did enjoy the game so far but I agree with the OP that this particular thing feels off. As does the shirt with Cam even if you are his size lol
This story is amazing! just wanted to add that there might be a bug with pronouns. When choosing Chris and the dogs pronouns the game kept referring to them as they.
Holy sh*t that betrayal wtf. They are so evil, is there any chance we can have revenge or get to see our jerk ex fiancee and his side piece get their karma? 😟
Just finished the demo, and it was a delight! Things flowed well, and though sentences did run on a bit at times, I was enjoying myself too much to notice more often than not XD
I'm including a list of minor typos I noticed as I went through, just to hopefully help out!
It’s hard to believe you’re doing this. You’re going to be working for yourself. Picking your clients, culminating your image.
The phrase is 'cultivating your image', so I'm assuming this is a typo that got autocorrected or something similar.
Before he can answer, someone pushes past you roughly, causing you to hit your side against a nearby seat. Markus quickly steps in front of you protectively. You’re unsure of the look that Markus gives the person but it was enough to stop them in their tracks. Maybe they thought Markus looked far to nice to be rude to.
This whole paragraph takes place before M tells you their name, so it was a bit early for that.
I nod softly, not really wanting the book or to be here any longer. I take it without saying another word."
This is the first option when parting ways with M and they give you their book; there's a " when no dialogue has occurred.
Cam nods, the bus hissing at its stop allowing you two to clamor on.
I'm assuming this is meant to be 'climb' or 'clamber', and not 'a group of noisy people shouting'.
congratulations on the release!!! i've been waiting for this since i saw some random ask of yours in august last year! thank you so much and i can't wait to play! <3
just finished chapter 1! i'm absolutely in love with your writing, the characters (minus a few select people), and the entire premise of the story. everything flowed so well, and it's obvious how much love and time was put into this! it's everything i've been looking forward to and i can't wait for more!
I'm glad you enjoyed it! Part of me was worried it was too long at one point. Yeah I had to have some bad apples in the story, I feel like it's essential to the type of story I want to tell. I look forward to how you feel about chapter 2!
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Finished the demo last night and I am coming out of this as a Cammie lover. I am also a Jade and Chris hater and I have a theory about Kara and I think my MC will N O T like it🧍🏾♀️
I like this alot, the demo is great. The ros are writen quite well seeing how im stuck between the follower, rival and the writer. Not exactly sure who I will go with for the first play through. Also really wanting to throw hands with jade and the family. Not sure if you plan on adding something like that but definitely would fight jade given the choice.
It's great people to be stuck between!
So the MC will be able to break their relationships with certain characters for good or mend them, and also effect relationships of some of the other characters. If you want to throw down with Jade it's not off the table!
I like it, was a pretty thorough demo. Looking forward to the next update.
ok but the MC is soooo oblivious are u not seeing how awkward Cam is? he obviously likes u cause no if that was me i would overthink every single thing he did. and the side story? MC rly is blind maybe i should've given them some glasses...
Not Cam's side story I can't lmao!!!!!! He's such a waffle I love him <3
Oooh I'm sooo giddy about Marcus's interaction with us! Love the story! Gonna follow this🤧
Yay M has another fan! Glad you enjoyed them and the story :D
oih my gosh, that was so so amazingly good, so well-written, fun and bittersweet. I hope we can have a chance to get revenge on our sister and ex-fiance. I wish you the best for writing and have a great time with it <3 I'm looking forward to more <3
Thank you! There will be ways to mess with Jade/Chris/ even MC's parents. It's possible to repair relationships of MC's and other characters or just completely wreck them. :D I'll take the wishes!
Ugh, Garnet my love! I absolutely cannot wait for more of this!
I love the story already
may I ask, who is apart of the poly route?
Kara and Isaac
Loving this, for some reason I like playing on difficult mode so going for Mr. Grumpy for my first main play, but Cam is so adorable, I already playing the alt version 1 and 2, because my shy and need to tease will battle each other, so need they their own saves. Favorite character is Aunt Emma all the way. I'm super excited to see where this goes and getting MC the best life and getting her dog back .
Well just played the Demo and enjoyed. I am also interested in how the story would develop. Currently Kim and Wilkens have my interest as ROs but that may change. Kim because of their past history with the MC and Wiklens because they are cute and I want to see where a relationship with them would end up.
I'm glad you enjoyed it! Yeah I know it's hard to decide currently because you're still getting to know the RO's. It's going to be a journey thats for sure.
Yeah, I have that, too with the switch of pronouns. If you choose a female dog it was one time referred as a "he". Chris is referred to as "they" several times.
I really love Cam and everything feels really fluid and over all satisfyingly balanced!
I have an issue though with the ex. I decided to make them an ex-friend and I don't get their reasoning. How can a simple friend feel such deep betrayal for the MC getting together with Chris? I get why we got no direct reasoning in the demo for the suspense alone but sadly with the choice for them to be no ex whom MC had a relationship with it kinda....irks. After the confrontation I was seriously thinking "wtf is their problem with MC and why ist it automatically narrated through MCs thought process that we feel guilt??" The last bit regarding the guilt felt forced upon the reader... No friend would turn to such extremes on a friendship simply cause they hate the partner? I believe there is a good explanation for it. Still. With what limited information WE currently got with the demo that whole affair feels...i dunno how to describe it. Before I was so throughouly invested in the story and then I was kinda kicked Out of this trance, If you get what I mean. It was a tad bit confusing.
Sorry that I needed so much words to deliver what I meant, hope it conveys what I meant to say.
And don't get me wrong, I was one of the first lurkers to your Tumblr account, I anticipated this demo for a long time and I truly love everything about it to pieces. The described situation above irritated me cause Im autistic af and have a hard time not knowing why someone hates me/ has a problem with sth I did - it deeply concerns me and that results to overthinking -and it kinda always bleeds through my reading experience in interactive fictions 😅 As one can guess I tried several times to reach a sliver of understanding...to no avail.
I love how strong Cams character was portrayed, If I had to choose what I enjoyed the most in your story it would be that. He just feels so complex and...well, real. Simply amazing work!
I loved the route of Cam even before the demo, you delivered this expectation and more. Repect. Not many interactive fictions can do that and captivate their readers like that.
To add to this if you select the flirt options with the "ex friend" choice prior it is worded as though you were in a relationship previously and I think that is how the ex friend without the flirting comes off as well, it reads like there was an invested romantic relationship that the MC potentially cheated on as opposed to friends. That being said I did enjoy the game so far but I agree with the OP that this particular thing feels off. As does the shirt with Cam even if you are his size lol
This story is amazing! just wanted to add that there might be a bug with pronouns. When choosing Chris and the dogs pronouns the game kept referring to them as they.
Thanks for the heads up I'll give it a look and fix it.
A total blast. Want more Cam please and thank you
:D Noted!
I thought for sure I’d want to go for the ex. I’m a sucker for that trope. But Cam!!!
Lol Cam won another one eh!
Amazing amazing amazing!!!!
Amazing x infinity!!!!!
Aaahh, 🤭 thank you so much.
I haven't finished the full demo yet but i just have to say holy shit i love this sooo much. Just absolutely fabulous, i need more
😊 Thank you for the kind words. Glad you're enjoying it so far.
Was waiting for this one! Loved the demo and am super excited for more!
I'm glad you enjoyed it!!
Holy sh*t that betrayal wtf. They are so evil, is there any chance we can have revenge or get to see our jerk ex fiancee and his side piece get their karma? 😟
Yup, both are possible.
Just finished the demo, and it was a delight! Things flowed well, and though sentences did run on a bit at times, I was enjoying myself too much to notice more often than not XD
I'm including a list of minor typos I noticed as I went through, just to hopefully help out!
The phrase is 'cultivating your image', so I'm assuming this is a typo that got autocorrected or something similar.
This whole paragraph takes place before M tells you their name, so it was a bit early for that.
This is the first option when parting ways with M and they give you their book; there's a " when no dialogue has occurred.
I'm assuming this is meant to be 'climb' or 'clamber', and not 'a group of noisy people shouting'.
Much appreciated! I'll go through and fix, I may end up switching to twee just for imports so that things don't get autocorrected etc.
YAY!!
Congratulations on the release!!
I admit, it's one of the if's I was most excited to play. I can't wait to play! Kisses from Brazil.🇧🇷❤️
I hope it lives up to your expectation then! All the love!
congratulations on the release!!! i've been waiting for this since i saw some random ask of yours in august last year! thank you so much and i can't wait to play! <3
Thank you so much. I know I made everyone wait, which I feel bad for. But I hope it's worth it!
Don't feel bad for taking the time! I think everyone prefers the quality of time than something rushed
Ah thanks for saying that. I didn't want it to feel rushed, which is making me actually need to add extra chapters in the long haul!
just finished chapter 1! i'm absolutely in love with your writing, the characters (minus a few select people), and the entire premise of the story. everything flowed so well, and it's obvious how much love and time was put into this! it's everything i've been looking forward to and i can't wait for more!
I'm glad you enjoyed it! Part of me was worried it was too long at one point. Yeah I had to have some bad apples in the story, I feel like it's essential to the type of story I want to tell. I look forward to how you feel about chapter 2!